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The two H/G stories you wrote
开云体育I've been re-reading them, and I've come to a very
interesting realisation:? Ginny isn't really all that likeable until after
the stupid mistake in Spiritus.? (It's amazing the things you realise as
you reread a story.? The things you don't really note the first time
through.)
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She reminds me a lot of Cenedra in the
Belgariad.? She's not the spoiled brat that Cenedra was, but she has her
moments.? Bat Bogeys for Harry being in the same room as her?? Her
double standard was something else that got to me.? When the Teen Witch
Weekly came out with that article, she publicly claimed Harry as hers, but when
Harry defends her and her family and claims her as his, she goes up one side of
him and down the other.? Make up your mind, girl!
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I think what really bothered me about both stories
(and I'm pretty sure you've read a different version of this over on Abraxan's
list) is the way that relationship changing things happened in both of your
stories, and they were completely dealt with in the very same chapter.?
Once she apologised to him in DA, everything was fine for them - no echoes of
hurt later in the story (admittedly, there was only that chapter and the
Epilogue), but there was no sign of it in SC.? Then she breaks the
engagement, and in that same chapter, DD whips out his wand and solves the
problem for them.? Other than to give Ginny the chance to grow up a little,
there was no real need for that to have happened.
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For that matter, Harry and Ginny forgave the
Weasley brothers awfully fast for that "prank" that they pulled in SC.?
Given his self esteem issues, that should have been hitting him in that chapter
and for chapters to come, because I could very easily see Harry coming to the
conclusion that since they were fighting so hard to keep him from proposing,
that the Weasley boys didn't want him as a family member.? And to be
honest, he should have been finding ways to prevent Ron and Hermione from being
together, at least for a little while.? The prank wouldn't necessarily have
driven it home, but being on the receiving end of what he did to them would
certainly have made the point.
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I realise that this may come across as a flame, and
that certainly isn't the intention I had.? All of us are growing as
writers, and sometimes we need an outside view.? I enjoy the stories
immensely (have them on my PDA in MobiPocket format, in fact) and love to reread
them.
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Hell, the fact that I am bothered by certain things
to this level tells me how good you are - if you weren't good, I wouldn't care
about the way that the characters act.
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Keith |
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--- In snorkack@..., "Keith McComb" <kinsfire@g...> wrote:
I realise that this may come across as a flame, and that certainlyisn't the intention I had. All of us are growing as writers, and sometimes we need an outside view. I enjoy the stories immensely (have them on my PDA in MobiPocket format, in fact) and love to reread them. tells me how good you are - if you weren't good, I wouldn't care about the way that the characters act. As you say, we're all learning to an extent. I see Dumbledore's Army and cringe reading it now, Spiritus Crystalus is an improvement, but only slightly so. In writing those fics I was too fixated on the concept of a chapter equaling one month of story time. Which in retrospect was probably a mistake. In DA we went from Kings Cross (End of 5th year) to back at Hogwarts in exactly two chapters. I don't think I could do that anymore. Sunset took four chapters to get to the express, then the very first day at Hogwarts took a chapter all to itself. Does this mean I'm planning on going back and revisiting DA and SC for major rewrites? Heh... nope not really. Compared to Sunset they ok fics in my book. But I'm not about to stop what I'm doing to rewrite them. As far as Ginny was concerned, then yeah, she wasn't all that nice. She treated Harry like her own personal toy for quite a while, and she had some serious growing up to do. Harry's lack of experience is part of the reason why he didn't kick her ass to the curb and find himself a girl that would shag him senseless and not mistreat him. He didn't know any better, but like Ginny, he needed time to grow and was willing (at least in our fic) to give Ginny the chance to grow. I suppose I could have made her grow up quicker, but most of DA was about Harry learning to deal with the damage left over by the dursleys. I didn't really start working on Ginny and her problems til the end of year 6. Sunset and its planned sequel will probably be the last Harry Potter fics unless I come up with a really good plot bunny. Its all learning. :) - Bob |
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--- In snorkack@..., "totorivers" <Tom.Beauvais@g...> wrote:
PotterSunset and its planned sequel will probably be the last Harry don'tfics unless I come up with a really good plot bunny. Its allThen we do have to hope you stumble upon a nice good plot bunny, we? of course, if you want ideas...And here I was hoping for another 6th and 7th year set of stories with Tracy Davis or Daphne Greengrass as the romantic interest -- uniting Gryffindor and Slytherin and eventually getting the whole school on board. sean |
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--- In snorkack@..., "bobmi357" <submitaccount@y...> wrote:
Sunset and its planned sequel will probably be the last Harry Potter*looking at increasing number of bunnies in bunny hutch* I have plenty. I'd be more than willing to share ... Dorothy |
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CRS
--- spd3432us <spd3432@...> wrote:
--- In snorkack@..., "totorivers"Hmmm.... you could try writing a Harry/female Slytherin, with a draker Harry, but still on the side of the light. Maybe corrupt Dumbledore to the point of joinind V... -Crs ____________________________________________________ Start your day with Yahoo! - make it your home page |
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--- In snorkack@..., CRS <malko050987@y...> wrote:
Now this has me somewhat confused. Bad Dumbledore.... check Darker than canon Harry.... check The only thing missing is hooking Harry up with a Slytherin. Hell we redeemed draco, what more could anyone ask for? I can't tell you how much my fingers itch to have an asteroid drop on his head. :D - Bob |
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CRS
--- bobmi357 <submitaccount@...> wrote:
--- In snorkack@..., CRSI meant a Dark dumbledore, as in using the dark arts, siding with Tom.... And by dark Harry, i meant that you should use his hate, his pain and his anger, and motivate him through that. Also, I'd expect this Harry to die at the end. -crs __________________________________________________ Do You Yahoo!? Tired of spam? Yahoo! Mail has the best spam protection around |
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