开云体育I've been re-reading them, and I've come to a very
interesting realisation:? Ginny isn't really all that likeable until after
the stupid mistake in Spiritus.? (It's amazing the things you realise as
you reread a story.? The things you don't really note the first time
through.)
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She reminds me a lot of Cenedra in the
Belgariad.? She's not the spoiled brat that Cenedra was, but she has her
moments.? Bat Bogeys for Harry being in the same room as her?? Her
double standard was something else that got to me.? When the Teen Witch
Weekly came out with that article, she publicly claimed Harry as hers, but when
Harry defends her and her family and claims her as his, she goes up one side of
him and down the other.? Make up your mind, girl!
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I think what really bothered me about both stories
(and I'm pretty sure you've read a different version of this over on Abraxan's
list) is the way that relationship changing things happened in both of your
stories, and they were completely dealt with in the very same chapter.?
Once she apologised to him in DA, everything was fine for them - no echoes of
hurt later in the story (admittedly, there was only that chapter and the
Epilogue), but there was no sign of it in SC.? Then she breaks the
engagement, and in that same chapter, DD whips out his wand and solves the
problem for them.? Other than to give Ginny the chance to grow up a little,
there was no real need for that to have happened.
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For that matter, Harry and Ginny forgave the
Weasley brothers awfully fast for that "prank" that they pulled in SC.?
Given his self esteem issues, that should have been hitting him in that chapter
and for chapters to come, because I could very easily see Harry coming to the
conclusion that since they were fighting so hard to keep him from proposing,
that the Weasley boys didn't want him as a family member.? And to be
honest, he should have been finding ways to prevent Ron and Hermione from being
together, at least for a little while.? The prank wouldn't necessarily have
driven it home, but being on the receiving end of what he did to them would
certainly have made the point.
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I realise that this may come across as a flame, and
that certainly isn't the intention I had.? All of us are growing as
writers, and sometimes we need an outside view.? I enjoy the stories
immensely (have them on my PDA in MobiPocket format, in fact) and love to reread
them.
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Hell, the fact that I am bothered by certain things
to this level tells me how good you are - if you weren't good, I wouldn't care
about the way that the characters act.
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Keith |
