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Excellent chapter as usual! I love your action scenes. I'm
wondering if the attempt on Snape could actually be considered just
a "warning". Given how physically tough wizards are (e.g., Neville
falling quite a distance in SS and only getting a broken wrist) it's
possible that Snape would have been expected to survive a fall like
that with some painful injuries to get the point across - then he'd
be jumping at shadows for a while until one of the shadows finally
jumped at *him*. The DEs want him to *know* what's coming - killing
him fast with the first attempt would not satisfy their sadistic
tendencies.
Poor Mrs. Norris! I hope she manages to find a new person. (Any
chance of a Crookshanks/Mrs. Norris pairing? And kittens?)
Really minor nitpick: "Her parents were laying on the floor covered
in blood." They were "lying" on the floor, not "laying." "Laying"
is the act of putting something down; once it's down, it
remains "lying" there.
I do love the way people are actually PAYING ATTENTION to Luna! In
too many fics, she just wanders around saying insightful stuff and
nobody pays attention because she's weird. Of course, she's just a
little more focused than usual here.
Does Harry know how to Vanish (as opposed to Banish) things yet? If
so, he should set up a Vanishing location of, say, the bottom of the
Marianas Trench, and Vanish things like Howlers, DE's wands and
things there. Hell, Vanish the DE's themselves! Feed 'em to a
kraken! (Vanishing is a potentially lethal spell; wonder why nobody
uses it that way?)
Keep up the good work! I'm waiting eagerly for next week's chapter!
Dorothy
