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> ?? Date: Mon, 28 Nov 2005 06:58:57 -0000
> ?? From: "bobmi357"
> Subject: Re: disapointed
>
> And I may even shy away from a H/Hr as well.

Please. I beg you. Please never even think about it ever again! At the moment YOU are the H/HR referenz all over the world. You update fast and the quality of your storys is remarkable (better than the original). There are enough good authors who do H/G, H/T, H/Bella, H/Cissa, H/Multi. Please! I BEG YOU!

> - Bob

Greetings

Maik

--- In snorkack@..., "Ed Becerra" <eabecerr@p...> wrote:

--- In snorkack@..., "sparky40sw" <kwallacewarner@c...> wrote:

I really enjoy SM Stirling also, although the Draka universive give me
the creeps - I would love to see a Peshawar Lancers crossover, or will
we find out, from an enterprising fanfic author that the death of fire
was an area effect spell from the world wide ministriers of magic
tokeep the muggles from destroying literally the world???

I wouldn't mind seeing a HP story based around Turtledove's
famous short "The Road Not Taken".

Or, better yet, one set in the TIME of Albus Dumbledore's youth,
but in the reality of Harry Harrison's Stars & Stripes series.

You have to wonder how British wizarding society would have
turned out after England was militarily occupied by American
and Irish troops.

Harrison sounds good. It's easy to imagine an American wizard (perhaps someone like
ooh... a historical figure like Frederick Douglass) putting the hurt on a Malfoy.

Stirling also sounds intriguing. What if Grindelwald was a Draka citizen?

James

--- In snorkack@..., "sparky40sw" <kwallacewarner@c...> wrote:

I really enjoy SM Stirling also, although the Draka universive give me
the creeps - I would love to see a Peshawar Lancers crossover, or will
we find out, from an enterprising fanfic author that the death of fire
was an area effect spell from the world wide ministriers of magic
tokeep the muggles from destroying literally the world???

I wouldn't mind seeing a HP story based around Turtledove's
famous short "The Road Not Taken".

Or, better yet, one set in the TIME of Albus Dumbledore's youth,
but in the reality of Harry Harrison's Stars & Stripes series.

You have to wonder how British wizarding society would have
turned out after England was militarily occupied by American
and Irish troops.

Ed Becerra

I'm sincerely sorry if this has been addressed before, but I'm rather
avidly curious when the first chapter of Sunrise comes out or
something to that effect? I know you guys are in the process of
writing it and I was wondering if there's a timeframe swirling in your
heads or something to that matter.

Secondly, would you be adverse to me printing these pages out,
possibly attaching some sort of a binding (okay, staples) and giving
it as a Christmas present? Would you want payment? Can I donate anyway?

And finally, have you found a beta/are you looking for one/I read
around and got lost...I'd be willing to do grammar-checks and whatnot
- I noticed some minor apostrophe mistakes at whatnot near the ending
chapters...something about "Hermione's eye's" which shouldn't have
been the case. I could get your 30-page chapters back to you in half a
day at the most, with grammar checking and plot comments, if you would
like.

Then again, I could just be dying to read the story before everyone
else. But that's a beta's perogative, no?

~Sean

Hi Annie,

You can download the chapters from the yahoogroup, it's in the files directory.
There : in the directory called after the story ^_^.

Le sujet Annie Burgos a envoye le rapport suivant pour l'experience du 27/11/2005 22:14:

Dear Alyx and Bob,
I beta for Neil of Hogwarts Exposed (punctuation and typos only, not
content) and full editing for Katie on Portkey, I never take more than
2 days to return a chapter, and would be happy to preview anything for
you that you would like. Some one you might want to draft would be
Fenriswolf - the 1st thing that I noticed about his work was that
there were never ANY errors in it.

Thanks so much for sharing anyway - the relatively tiny number of
errors is a very small price to pay for excellent stories delivered
every week or so.
Warmest Regards
Ken
kwallacewarner at cs dot com

--- In snorkack@..., "Alyx" <alyxnw@y...> wrote:

An outside beta/editor would be a great thing. We know we've missed
several typos and such in our stories and have accepted that we'll
never catch them all ourselves.

However (yep, there's that word again), we've talked to several people
about reading our chapters before we post them, but have been unable
to find anyone who can work in our time frame. Because our chapters
are large, we've been told that the wait would be two weeks (shortest)
to a full month (longest) for the chapter to be finished and sent back.

It seems most folks are busier than we are and actually have lives
away from their keyboards. How dare they! :D

We'll try to be more careful in editing. That's the best we can do,
unless you know someone who can beta a chapter for us in a day or

two :o)

As for the Brit-picking? We're Americans, but we do our best not
'Americanize" the HP Universe. We've asked a few Brits for help with
locations and such in SoB, but we're not going to delay a chapter
because we need a Brit to read it over first. So far, our British
readers have been a most forgiving lot, for which we are thankful.

While Bob and I are glad to get any and all reviews (both negative and
positive), the main reason we write is to please ourselves. We enjoy
the process of building a story. If we can give a few people a couple
of hours of enjoyment along the way, we're happy to do so.

~Alyx~



--- In snorkack@..., "Phil" <tarkas1956@n...> wrote:

I "reviewed" the story over on ffa.net (hey, I was the first one!
<g>) and that stands as my first impression of a very good fic with
some definitely intriguing ideas in it. Kudos to you, Bob and Alyx,
for more of your usual excellent work.

However... (somehow, there's always a "however," isn't there? ;-)) on
_re_-reading it, I find that, IMO at least, it really needs some
editing. From what you write, here and elsewhere, I presume that you
beta-read "internally" -- that is, between the two authors, you check
what's been written yourself -- which is fine, and I would not say
that the results of working that way are any less effective than
those of something like Tim's Beta Horde. The problem is, as I see it
(and you may not), that somewhere, an awful lot of typos and syntax
errors go un-noticed ("your" for "you're", for instance), and you
REALLY need a Brit-picker; "Parallels" is _full_ of Americanisms, and
I don't mean something like the root beer, which is explained
perfectly in the context of the story (and you can buy it here,
anyway). More like the continual references to graduation, to give an
example.

So... wonderful story, but annoying to read more than once because of
these small niggles. I wish I could suggest an easy fix, but I can't.
And I hope that you will take this in the constructive sense that I
mean it; the one problem that a lot of stories on ffa have is the
need for an editor/proof-reader rather than a beta and, regrettably,
this is one of them. FWIW, so is "Hope," so you're in good company.
<g>

Phil

Dear Brian,
Do you have extra copies to sell?? or an address to send royalties to?
and just how much should the royalty be for each button??

Every time I listen to the talking heads from either major party in
the US I wonder where in the Constitution they found that stuff - and
then I go and buy more ammo

Ken


--- In snorkack@..., "Brian McCrary" <bkmccrary@c...> wrote:

Message: 9
Date: Sat, 26 Nov 2005 21:03:51 -0000
From: "bobmi357" <submitaccount@y...>
Subject: Re: Parallels and Sunrise (***very light spoiler for

Parallels***)

Freedom Fries were formally called french fries. The morons running
our country, idiots that they are, decided one day that they didn't
like what france was doing, and in a fit if rage, they renamed a
national food from french fries to freedom fries. Of course this
immediately shocked the french into behaving. NOT! :D

The really shocking thing was the people re-elected these clowns and
only now are beginning to regret it. Ah well this isn't a politics
board so I'll close it with that thought. :D

- bob

#################################

As I recall, it was only a couple of knuckle-dragging yahoos with an
unfortunately large amount of media access that tried to start the

whole

'Freedom Fries' thing, but even at our most fervently jingoistic

moments,

the majority of people thought it was pretty silly, not to mention

something

of a non sequitur; why try and lambaste a country for exercising its

own

freedom of belief by coming up with something that, technically, is a
compliment? After all, if you're going to change the name from

French Fries

to Freedom Fries, doesn't than mean that French is synonymous with

Freedom?

^_^

Unfortunately, the USA is so firmly mired in a two-party system that

far too

often voting is a matter of choosing the lesser of two weevils, and the
third alternative (which I have on a novelty button) tends to be

frowned

upon by the Powers-That-Be:

"TODAY IS ELECTION DAY, AND WE URGE ALL CITIZENS TO VOTE 'NO' WITH THE
WEAPON OF THEIR CHOICE!" ~ KVSR Radio, the Voice of VISRTown ~**

Fenris

**Notice to all Snooping Government Whatzits and Closet Redcoats: The
sentiment expressed in the preceding quotation is intended as

satire, and

not the instigation or support of violence as a means of political

dissent.

Thank You. ~T. Payne~

I really enjoy SM Stirling also, although the Draka universive give me
the creeps - I would love to see a Peshawar Lancers crossover, or will
we find out, from an enterprising fanfic author that the death of fire
was an area effect spell from the world wide ministriers of magic
tokeep the muggles from destroying literally the world???

i hope some one with writing skill (not me) will be attacked by the
plot bunnies

Thanks for bring up the subject
Ken


--- In snorkack@..., "Edward C. Regal" <eregal@s...> wrote:

Aha!

Someone else who admires the works of Sterling!

How about a Potter/Draka crossover - Harry monitors the Draka opening a
portal into his world, but turns the tables on them and shoves

Moldieshorts

and the DeathEaters back through it instead. With the portal

destroyed,

Voldie is stuck but assumes that he should be able to take over as

another

pureblood like the Draka themselves. Imagine the fun when he

realizes that

he is, not being Draka, considered a low-life scum, slightly above

an algae

bloom in social position and destined for the slave block.

Or a Potter/Conquistador crossover - the gate between our world and its
parallel has been destroyed but the scientists keep trying,

unknowing that

the reality fan they are exploring goes to some very different

places - not

the world of southern California in the early 2000's, but Scotland

in the

1990's and to the grounds of a very different kind of school -

Hogwart's.

Or maybe going back to the classic Cities in Flight - Hogwart's and
Hogsmeade are the last bastions of freedom on a blasted and destroyed
planet. With Voldemort and his forces slowly closing the gaps and

forcing

the defenders back behind the wards, Harry and Dumbledore use a last

ditch

plan and tear the school and town free of Earth and flee to the stars,
searching for freedom and another place they can call home.

Ed
sailrpopeye

Date: Sat, 26 Nov 2005 14:40:25 -0000
From: "drowgehirnaziz" <draqensis@a...>
Subject: Re: Plot Bunnies

Any chance some people were serious (not Sirius) about
the extra plot bunnies floating around? With
permission, I'd like to use one or two.

Hmm, plot bunny generator in motion...

Harry Potter/Peshawar Lancers crossover. In October 1878 a series of
cometary impacts devestate Europe and North America. Durmstrang and
Beuxbatons take direct hits and the largest strike, in the mid-
atlantic, causes a tsumani that destroys the eastern seaboard of north
america and much of the atlantic coasts of europe.

As the muggle authorities struggle to survive in the face of what is
predicted to be as many as five years of negligible harvests in the
temperate regions of the northern hemisphere, the Wizarding World is
almost equally devestated - and the fate of that world will rest upon
the shoulders of one young wizard: eighteen-year-old Albus Dumbledore.

D.

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In a message dated 11/26/2005 12:29:02 PM Central Standard Time, oktopus.galactika@... writes:

They honnestly make us foreign readers cringe with the dreadful result you're getting.

?

Goes both ways.?? Years ago I had an evening class in writing at a community college.? The teacher was a sweet and clever woman, but it was her second job and English was not her first language.? When she came to class very tired after a full day of teaching elsewhere, she had a tendency to put sentences on the board using English words and German sentence structure.?? Four years of high school German clued me in, but the rest of the class was terribly confused.

?

Mary

I would be willing to beta for you, and could probably give you a
4-day to one week turnaround. I have betaed for Jestana, and
nit-picked for Magdalena. I am a writer myself, and grammar and
misspelling are two of MY pet peeves.
You can email me privately if you're interested. I did like
Parallels, and found myself yelling, "You go Harry!" multiple times.
Filodea
--- In snorkack@..., "Alyx" <alyxnw@y...> wrote:

An outside beta/editor would be a great thing. We know we've missed
several typos and such in our stories and have accepted that we'll
never catch them all ourselves.

However (yep, there's that word again), we've talked to several people
about reading our chapters before we post them, but have been unable
to find anyone who can work in our time frame. Because our chapters
are large, we've been told that the wait would be two weeks (shortest)
to a full month (longest) for the chapter to be finished and sent back.

It seems most folks are busier than we are and actually have lives
away from their keyboards. How dare they! :D

We'll try to be more careful in editing. That's the best we can do,
unless you know someone who can beta a chapter for us in a day or

two :o)

As for the Brit-picking? We're Americans, but we do our best not
'Americanize" the HP Universe. We've asked a few Brits for help with
locations and such in SoB, but we're not going to delay a chapter
because we need a Brit to read it over first. So far, our British
readers have been a most forgiving lot, for which we are thankful.

While Bob and I are glad to get any and all reviews (both negative and
positive), the main reason we write is to please ourselves. We enjoy
the process of building a story. If we can give a few people a couple
of hours of enjoyment along the way, we're happy to do so.

~Alyx~



--- In snorkack@..., "Phil" <tarkas1956@n...> wrote:

I "reviewed" the story over on ffa.net (hey, I was the first one!
<g>) and that stands as my first impression of a very good fic with
some definitely intriguing ideas in it. Kudos to you, Bob and Alyx,
for more of your usual excellent work.

However... (somehow, there's always a "however," isn't there? ;-)) on
_re_-reading it, I find that, IMO at least, it really needs some
editing. From what you write, here and elsewhere, I presume that you
beta-read "internally" -- that is, between the two authors, you check
what's been written yourself -- which is fine, and I would not say
that the results of working that way are any less effective than
those of something like Tim's Beta Horde. The problem is, as I see it
(and you may not), that somewhere, an awful lot of typos and syntax
errors go un-noticed ("your" for "you're", for instance), and you
REALLY need a Brit-picker; "Parallels" is _full_ of Americanisms, and
I don't mean something like the root beer, which is explained
perfectly in the context of the story (and you can buy it here,
anyway). More like the continual references to graduation, to give an
example.

So... wonderful story, but annoying to read more than once because of
these small niggles. I wish I could suggest an easy fix, but I can't.
And I hope that you will take this in the constructive sense that I
mean it; the one problem that a lot of stories on ffa have is the
need for an editor/proof-reader rather than a beta and, regrettably,
this is one of them. FWIW, so is "Hope," so you're in good company.
<g>

Phil

An interesting AU story there. I've seen the various components in various forms in other stories (Evil!Ron, Bitch!Ginny and Introvert!Hermione are fairly common themes in AU H/Hr stories). Howeever, you have given this story your own usual touch and flare.

I particularly liked the slant you gave your Bad Ginny's personality. Too often, AU Bitch!Ginny characters are little more than one-dimensional sluts. You managed to create a believable Slytherin version of the character with the requisite ambition and cunning for that house. The AU Ron is still a red-headed Crabbe/Goyle-style thug, though.

What I found interesting was that you made this a subtly different society too, with far more ingrained Blood Supremicist attitudes that have affected even the Weasleys. Congratulations for not making Arther and Molly too harsh though. It seems that Ron and Ginny's choices were their own, not a result of childhood programming, as with Draco Malfoy.

A nice little concept. I look forward to seeing more from you.

BenRG's Rating: 8/10

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I don't suppose this fellow was any relationship to Umbridge was he? I think I'll take the blood quill thanks :/

--Steven

Ed Becerra wrote:

-






-i disagree i believe because of his blood and familial potion they
have it can prove he is a harry potter and should be allowed the
fortune. he is the son of james potter and shouldn't matter what
dimension he comes form.


- In snorkack@..., "Peter Volk" <peter.volk@i...> wrote:

I had wondered the same thing. It seems obvious that Harry is not

the

Harry of this universe, and that any claim that he is could easily

be

defeated in court. Dimensional travellers are rare enough that the
normal magical ID spells wouldn't take them into account, but

surely

they could be successfully challenged - particularly with so much

money

at stake.

I see Harry as being a rich skilled immigrant, but not someone who

has

ancestral entitlements to status or power. How could he be? He

just got

here.

Peter

-----Original Message-----
From: snorkack@... [mailto:snorkack@...] On
Behalf Of titaest
Sent: Sunday, 27 November 2005 7:03 PM
To: snorkack@...
Subject: [snorkack] your stories


I truly enjoy your stories and love parrallel but you left me
wondering did harry sue the potters of that dimension in

retaliation

of how they treated his mom and sister.

thanks You

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Well, it has been a few months, and now it is not working.
--- In snorkack@..., "Kirk L. Staley" <kauthor@g...>
wrote:

--- In snorkack@..., "dictator_hynkel"
<markus.merz1@e...> wrote:

--- In snorkack@..., "bobmi357" <submitaccount@y...>

but since Yahoo only gives us a paltry
20mb for storage here, it would be a shame to waste the

space ...

I have the files for both Dumbledore's Army and Harry Potter and

the

Spiritus Crystalus as one word document (in summ 2 files) on a

private

webspace available.

link:



It's a host connected via adsl, so be patient with the little on.

regards
Markus

p.s. Bob and Alyx, if you see this offer as a violation of your
intellectual property, send a reply and i put it down.

Excuse me, but there are some gaps in the files. For example,

there

is no Snape Story at all, and I have been seeing some repeating
dialogue in the story. Do you mind sending it to the author so

they

can look over the file, and see what's wrong, and send it back to
you in the right way? I suspects this might be the same for the
other fanfiction.

I truly enjoy your stories and love parrallel but you left me
wondering did harry sue the potters of that dimension in retaliation
of how they treated his mom and sister.

thanks You

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